【学生样本】
Dear Peter，
I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.①In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.②In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans.③First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.④Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.⑤At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers.
Welcome to our school if you have any chance.
Yours，
Li Hua
【评论点拨】 我们来看看学生的样本有什么地方可以改进：
第①句：“In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air ”比较生硬， to make our school beautiful应该改为to make our school more beautiful；“we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的have改为plant会好些。
第②句：没有涉及表格内的内容， 是个废句， 而且还霸占了后面的信息的位置。
第③句：“First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.”中的画线部分没有表达出“供同学们参观、实践”的意思。
