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读后续写思维拓展训练之19——增强表现力之二
运用富有表现力的形容词和副词
恰当地使用富有表现力的形容词和副词,能够使文章更加丰富多彩,描写地更为准确,文章更有生机。使用这些形容词和副词时,要注意把握这些词汇的确切内涵,符合故事发展的内在逻辑。
佳句观摩
1.他给了我一个微笑。
一般句:He gave me a smile.
提升句:He gave me a bright smile, with his eyes sparkling (一个灿烂的微笑,眼睛闪闪发光).
2.他点了点头。
一般句:He nodded.
提升句:With apparently unwilling affection (带着显然不情愿的神情), he nodded.
3.我凝视着他们渐渐远去的身影。
一般句:I gazed at their receding figures.
提升句:I gazed affectionately (深情地) at their receding figures.
4.拉斐尔向我们打招呼,并分享了他的故事,这让我很惊讶。
一般句:Greeting us, Rafael shared his story, which left me surprised.
提升句:Greeting us with a confident smile (带着自信的微笑), Rafael shared his story in a magnetic voice (用一种磁性的声音), which left me surprised.